Did I over-edit the start of Princelings?

When I first wrote Princelings of the East, I opened the book with a fairly lyrical description of the Castle in the middle of the marsh and a young princeling gazing out across the reeds, watching the wind blowing them around.  After reading a lot of other openings I decided to change this to a sort of ‘caught in the act’ opening line.  Some of the feedback makes me wonder whether I did the right thing.

I was wondering whether you’d like to have the two versions side by side and a vote on which you prefer.

Would you like that?   If you would, please click the ‘like’ button below and I’ll set it up for you.

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